I have made many strides in the global end of my essay. Using the ideas from my peers I have decided to reread my essay and look for any sentences that seem to be written in an awkward way. I rewrote those sentences so that they run smoothly. I also addressed more authors in my piece so that it supplies more evidence and supports my points I am trying to make. I think that these things will make my essay stronger because it gives the readers more evidence to support the claim and they are able to read the essay in a smooth manner.